If this is your first go at Friday Fictioneers, here’s how it works:
Every Friday authors from around the world gather here to share their 100-words and offer constructive crit and encouragement to each other. This creates a wonderful opportunity for free reading of very fresh fiction! Readers are encouraged to comment as well. A thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting and for this weeks picture.
Here is my story:
Teri looked at the frosted window pane with her artist’s eye. To be able to take what mother nature provided for a muse this cold winter day and paint it on canvas would prove to be challenging. Challenges she was not afraid of. She looked again at each unique ice crystal upon the window and smiled. To Teri it was like looking at each individual she knew. So different yet so wonderful in each their own way. As she was also. She picked her paintbrush up with her toes and delicately dipped it in the paint and then lightly touched the canvas.
Pretty writing, beautiful story. I liked the sense of peace you portrayed.
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Thank you so much!
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Having an artist in the family (not me), I especially appreciate your story.
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Thank you! As I am also an artist, it must have been on my mind this morning.
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Beautiful story. Love that the artist is physically challenged.
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Thank you. Not sure where that came from, but liked it.
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Hi Jackie,
Wow, what a great twist. Totally put things in a different perspective. I thought it was good before that. Your ending made it great. Ron
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Thank you so much Ron. Appreciate your kind words.
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Ditto Ron’s comment. Wonderful twist in an already rich tale.
I’m here: http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/11/09/frostbitten-ff-91112/
Beste,
Mik
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Thank you very much! Appreciate you reading and liking it.
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I love the end and how the sentence “challenges she was not afraid of” in a new perspective.
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thank you! I was hoping I could convey that without being too obvious.
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An interesting twist at the end there — I almost think you could leave out the line “As she was also” to heighten the impact of it and give us a sense of how she values the differences in others. On the other hand, “Challenges she was not afraid of,” was expert foreshadowing — great job!
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Thank you and appreciate the tips! 🙂
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Nice, Jackie! I enjoyed the subtle twist at the end. And, she’s so at peace with herself.
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thank you! I liked how it turned out
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Dear jackie,
nice story, good message, great twist.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you Doug!
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A nice subtle twist at the end. I’d like to have had maybe a bit more about Teri’s disability and less about the ice. But there’s the rub. 100 words do limit. A unique take on the prompt nonetheless.
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Thank you!
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I agree with Brudberg’s note about “challenges.” Touching surprise at the end.
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thank you so much!
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inspiring…
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thanks!
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I am going to agree with Brian on this one..”as she was also” gave it away for me and it was at that point I knew she had no arms or use of her arms. An inspiring story and a nice piece of writing on the whole.
Tom
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yes I see you and Brian’s point on that. Thank you for reading.
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Wow WOW! Knocked my socks off. As an artist I loved it, as a person it left me in awe of your character.
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thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it! 🙂
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Didn’t expect that last line at all. Such a good story.
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thank you!
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