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- Thank you to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for these wise words: Please check our Rochelle’s blog to see the rules!
- WELCOME TO FRIDAY FICTIONEERSIf you’re looking for a good time with interesting people you’ve come to the write place.
We are a growing community of blogging writers who come together each week from all parts of the globe to share individual flash fictions from a single photo prompt. The prompt goes up early Wednesday morning CST to give each writer time to compose a story by Friday. Some use the photo as a mere inspiration while others use it as an illustration. Use your imagination and think outside the box.
WARNING! This is an addiction for which there is no 12 step recovery program.
- LET’S TRY SOMETHING DIFFERENT THIS WEEK!
- In your blog post title please label your story’s genre: Historical Fiction, Erotica, Horror, Evangelical, Humor etc. (While profanity isn’t a genre please include warning if you use it.) It’s a small thing but will alert readers who might possibly be offended by the nature of certain stories. It’s also a good practice for an author to know his or her genre. Agents and editors do ask for genre right along with word count. There are few hard and fast rules in this group but I’m asking you, for everyone’s benefit, to please comply with this one. Thank you.
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A Romantic Mystery
Flickering of the fireworks lit up the house. The faint popping sounds could be heard in the eerie silence. Dusty cobwebs slowly rippled with the slight breeze of her passing. Another year passed, another ahead of her. She stopped in the doorway. She knew she couldn’t pass through.
She saw him in the garden. He looked so sad, this man she loved with her whole heart. She wished she could touch his face, make his sadness disappear. But, she couldn’t. She could only watch as his tears slipped down his cheek. As he walked away softly saying,
“Why did I not die with you?”
Awww…this is sad. One can only imagine his pain and loneliness…very well done
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I didn’t mean it to come out sad, but I know that’s where it went.
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Well done, Jackie. Sad, but feel the intensity of the female character. I don’t think it’s going to work out for her the way she wants.
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Maybe you are right. thank you
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Another good one! And again I didn’t know the ending! It was sad but also mysterious….
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thank you Tiny! yes, sad. but could go either way I suppose. Mysterious? I was trying for that.
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You amaze me, what a sad story.
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I usually don’t do sad, but for some reason it came out that way. thank you for the compliment!
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Wow. I love how so many people are coming up with different stories with this. I really like yours, so sad
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thank you! yes it’s amazing to me also how many different stories come from the same picture. Thanks for reading!
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Jackie P…..Sad story..sometimes they write themselves.
Tom
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too true Tom. Thanks!
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You’re welcome I could see the guy in my head. Sad to have true love and then have to live the rest of your life without it.
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yes it is sad, I kind of know what that’s like.
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I really like this, Jackie. You painted quite a picture in so few words. And yes, it was sad.
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thank you Maddie!
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Dear Jackie,
I was going to say what Tom said. In one of my novels I had a character a certain way in my head and she wrote herself quite the opposite. Poignant piece you’ve written. Am I reading it wrong or is this a “Ghost’s eye view?” In any case I felt the man’s anguish. .
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Hi Rochelle,
Characters have a way of asserting themselves even in very short posts do they not? Thank you for understanding. Yes, it is in the “ghosts” viewpoint. A great love does not stop after death, for either side.
Jackie
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Like the ripple of the cobwebs. Quite affecting
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thank you!
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Yes I took this as a ‘ghost’s eye view’. Nicely done and an orginal take on the prompt.
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Thank you Sandra!
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My step-mother always joked with my dad that they were going to go together. It didn’t happen that way, but he died before a year was up. Some people are so thoroughly connected. Good piece, emotionally charged.
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yes I’ve known couples that have died close together. It’s sad yet not in a way. Thank you for reading!
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Very sad. I also notice that the female character has chosen not to move on into the after-life due to his pain. She has not moved on into her rest period because she is alive and still with him (in another dimension). Great job.
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thank you! She hasn’t moved on because she can’t while he is still in so much pain.
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Sad .. but yes, what happened? I must say, the last line surprised me.
FYI: I see Bumble here. On my site, see comments from Rich (or Brainsnorts in the sidebar) because I know he does these.
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yes they both do these. Rich is so good as is Amy from Brumbles. I try my best. I’m not sure why I did sad, just came that way. My brain confuses me sometimes.
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No reason to apologize … it just happened. Have a good weekend.
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Tenderly tragic…
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thank you!
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Hi Jackie,
A heart-tugger for sure. Nice descriiptions of the empty house. Ron
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Hi Ron, thank you. I appreciate it.
Jackie
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was NOT ready for that ending. well done.
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thank you Rich!
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The twist at the end was well done. I expected her to be the survivor, not the ghost. I liked this one a lot.
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thank you so much!
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this was really good, and I felt sad at the separation
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thank you, yes I felt sad too
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funny how characters take on their own personality
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for sure, I like when they do, to a point…..
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It may not be your normal genre but you pulled it off well and with a twist at the end. I, too, took a different tack this week. Sometimes as you say, these things just go there.
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so very true. thank you
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A ghost story… I love it. Although, not such a sad one, JackieP. Very nice mood, I felt so sorry for both of them.
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yes it was sad wasn’t it, but if I expanded it, maybe then it wouldn’t be so sad
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Heart touching! Great job 🙂
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thank you! 🙂
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Ah, very sad, but oh so very good
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thank you!
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Oh so sad! Another fabulous story with another fabulous twist! How do you do it? 😀
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thank you! I have no idea, really, where it comes from! 🙂
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Awww 😦
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yeah I know. it’s really sad. 😦
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Like the movie Ghost.
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I loved that movie. It was sad and romantic, made me wish someone loved me like that.
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Yes, that’s rare indeed. Maybe only in the movies.Or Friday flash fiction 😉
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Very sad 😦 Very good 🙂
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thank you Abraham!
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