Friday Fictioneers ~ Feb 8

It’s that time of the week again. Friday Fictioneers! Thank you once more to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting this fine challenge every week. We all thank you!

THE CHALLENGE:

Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)

THE KEY:

Make every word count.

Come join us! It’s great fun and practice for your writing. Everyone is friendly and helpful. If you would like to read more stories please click on Rochelle’s name above and then scroll down to the ย blue frog. Thank you!

copyright-Rich Voza
copyright-Rich Voza

 

*Genre ~ Fiction* (100 words)

The sun rose over the horizon. Bright, new beginning. For the day and for herself. The plane would be boarding soon. The first flight out that she could book. She had one suitcase. Not much to show for ten years. Except the baggage she carried inside her soul.

She smiled. She felt the heaviness leave her heart as the sun rose higher. Ten years of her life wasted. Imprisoned. Now she was free.

It took her the full ten years to plot out her revenge. He was going to pay for his betrayal.

 

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58 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers ~ Feb 8

  1. I think this was my favorite line: “Except the baggage she carried inside her soul.” That’s the heaviest baggage of all. You have me wondering what the betrayal was. If revenge is a dish best served cold, she’s in good shape!

    janet

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  2. Oh Jackie, I didn’t see that end coming…I thought more like freedom for herself from stuff other than a man and his betrayal…very well done. I like the build up leading to a great ending.

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  3. the baggage she carried inside her soul — i like this ^^
    but oh god, what’s she planning to do now? i mean revenge is great and all but i hope she doesn’t end up in prison again. freedom and being happy is after all the greatest revenge.i hope she changes her mind..
    on second thought, maybe he really should have it. lol
    great story ^^

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  4. You took me by surprise right off the bat. When I first saw the picture, I remembered how much I liked flying at sunset, yet you saw a sunrise and a new beginning. Cool. Of course there couldn’t be a tidy, sweet ending. Revenge is on that horizon! ๐Ÿ™‚ Very nice, as usual.

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    1. JackieP

      I’m my usual self Tom PPPP, thank you. Not sure that’s a good thing or not. ๐Ÿ˜‰ Ah yes revenge, I wouldn’t want to cross her path either. She is a patient one.

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  5. Like others, I love the baggage in her soul line. I also like how her soul lightens with the rising sun. Hate to be the clean up crew at the crime scene. Great post, Jackie.

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    1. JackieP

      If it is autobiographical it is only the plane ride and freedom. I’m not patient enough to wait 10 years for revenge. ๐Ÿ˜‰ thanks for reading El, appreciate it as always.

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        1. JackieP

          Maybe not this time, but you never know, maybe if he did go after she would drop her feelings of revenge. It’s been known to happen. I believe in happy endings

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    1. JackieP

      hey Frank! Was wondering where you went off to. I am going to go read your post now, how did I miss it? I’m so glad you stopped by! Thank you.

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  6. Good story. Could continue into so many different genres in the manner in which she offloads, or doesn’t, that baggage. ‘Baggage’ of the soul and ‘real’ baggage, is a good play on words. Ann

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