It’s my favorite time of week again! Yes, Friday Fictioneers time! Thanks goes out again to Rochelle Wisoff-Fields for hosting. Please click on her name if you want to join and read the rules or if you want to read more stories!
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
Genre/General Fiction (99 words)
She set up her easel and paints, angling it to get the best light. Sitting on the small fold up stool she studied the broken building. Memories flooded her mind. Younger days of playing around the brightly painted barn. Grandfather and father working inside. Sparkling sunshine flooding her private playground. She picked up her brush and colors built on canvas.
Not of rundown and forgotten, but of bustling and worked filled days. The ghosts of the past watched with approval as an aged spotted hand brought life once more to worn, weathered wood. It lived again on canvas, painted with loving memories.
The Last Chapter 
I love the imagery in this… Very good.
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thank you! I did so much editing trying to get it right.
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I think you got it right!
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Jackie PPPP,
Nicely done bringing out a happy side to this prompt….I enjoyed this trip down memory lane.
Tom
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Tom PPPPP,
thank you. I do have a lighter side. 🙂 just don’t always show it. Thanks for reading as always my friend.
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A touching tribute to the old barn, beautifully told in 99 words!
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thank you Tiny!
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Hi Jackie
This is lovely! Makes me feel all warm and fuzzy 🙂
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I love it when people get the warm fuzzies. 🙂
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I wish I could paint like that.
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Thanks 🙂
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🙂
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Interesting interpretation. I like your description with the “age spotted hand” and “brightly painted barn” and “private playground”.
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Thank you so much!
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You deftly painted a word picture as surely as she painted a real one.
janet
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aww thank you Janet! appreciate it. 🙂
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the good memories immortal on canvas — in a nice dorian grey kind of way.
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thank you
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there is a poetic beauty to it..very well done
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Thank you!
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You described the scene very well.
I loved a lot of phrases here.
Especially this: ” The ghosts of the past watched with approval ”
Very good story.
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Thank you Parul!
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lovely story with lovely words.. i really liked this line: The ghosts of the past watched with approval 🙂
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thank you kz! 🙂
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Beautiful – I really liked this.
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Thank you Sandra!
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Dear Jackie,
The ghosts of the past watch with approval and so do I. Well painted prose.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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thank you so much Rochelle.
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I absolutely love your style! So glad I came back to read your reply on link! Thank you for your sweet comments! I definitely will be roaming through your posts! love your blog!!!!! (By the way….I am Diane Reed…. the avitar I use here is me but just slightly dated! lol.)
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Hi Diane! Thanks so much for stopping by! Also thank you for enjoying my blog. Appreciate it. I will be going through your blog also. I liked what I saw before.
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I love the images you created here, a feel good story, well done
Dee
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Thank you Dee!
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Hi Jackie,
Great premise for your story, painting the memories of the past instead of the decayed fragments that are left today. I enjoyed this. Ron
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Thank you Ron! Appreciate you reading
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a beautifully told story. nice work.
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thank you so much!
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now i want more than 100 words…
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hmm I could give you 101 words. hows that? ha! kidding. thanks girl. Have fun this weekend and relax! big hugs
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Wow, Jackie. This is beautiful writing. I think this is one of your strongest that I’ve read from you.
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thank you so much Amy. 🙂 That made my day!
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This is beautiful and sweet at the same time. Very well done
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thank you boomie! love the new picture of you btw!
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i love when ghosts do nice things like send their approval instead of scaring the blood out of us. 🙂
i’m happy now. thanks. ♥
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my ghosts are usually the nice kind 🙂
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then it must be safe on Halloween @ your house. :p
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The ghosts of past watched with approval – loved that line. Great job.
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thank you shirley!
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“The ghosts of the past watched with approval as an aged spotted hand brought life once more to worn, weathered wood. It lived again on canvas, painted with loving memories.” Very nice. Well-written story and refreshing to read one with a positive ending.
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thank you! I love old barns, so I saw a happy ending. glad you enjoyed it.
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What a sweet take of nostalgia 🙂
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Thank you Bjorn! Glad as always for the visit from you. 🙂
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Remembering the past is so much better than lamenting the present, especially with so much wear and tear on display.
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so true. Thanks for reading
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You never had anything to worry about with writing, Jackie. You do such a wonderful job with these flash stories. I’m always amazed at the emotion and amount of story you tell in so few words. Love the imagery here.
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Thank you so much Maddie! 🙂
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I love the image you portray of how it was and how it is today, just as an artist would see it.
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Thank you Linda 🙂
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