Time once again for that flash fiction challenge known world-wide as Friday Fictioneers! Hosted by the talented and wise Rochelle Wisoff-Fields, who guides us with gentle hands and words.
Come one! Come all! Join us in the merriment and writing fun that is Friday Fictioneers! Just click above on Rochelle’s name and be swept away to where the rules and links to other stories await you!
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
This weeks delightful picture!
Genre/Adventure (105 words)
“Come on Jen! We need to keep climbing!”
“I can’t Mike. There’s too many steps, I just can’t do it!”
“I won’t let you give up! Now get your ass moving!” Grabbing Jen, Mike pulled her up the stairs. The loud clumping of boots below pushed them even faster.
Upward they went. Breathing hard, hearts pounding. Reaching the top they ran to the railing, the trees were tiny from such a distance. Climbing up, they held hands and jumped as the boots behind them reached the last step.
The soldiers looked over the railing and saw the parachutes as they gracefully dropped them to safety.
ohhhh…who were they running from?
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from the military of a foreign country because they stole something from them. ….lol…how’s that for making it up on the fly?
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ahhhhh….very good 🙂
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🙂
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I love the suspense!
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Thanks! hard to build up in so few words…
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Don’t we all have times when we could use a parachute? Good story.
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oh yes, imaginary or not. Thanks for reading 🙂
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Nice tension.
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thank you JK, appreciate you reading 🙂
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Your story is full of anticipation. You pulled me right inside it. Really good writing.
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thank you so much!
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So suspensful
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Thank you
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a very good twist. unexpected ending. and perfect in 100 words
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Thank you! appreciate you reading
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For some reason, I knew they were going to jump, but knowing you the way I do, I thought they would just jump. So happy to read they had parachutes. 🙂 Very good, Jackie.
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Well I did at first think of them just jumping. But then I thought that would be too final! ha. Thanks Maddie! 🙂
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It was nice not to have them jumping to their deaths and have the surprise be on the soldiers. Hopefully they’ll get away from any other soldiers, too.
janet
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I think they will get clean away. Thanks Janet 🙂
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Clever plan! I like it, Jackie! Great story for the beautiful staircase. It does seem full of intrigue.
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Thank you Amy!
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Nice Jackie, very nice
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thanks boomie 🙂
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I enjoyed the surprise of the parachutes and can clearly imagine them floating down within the circular staircase.
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Thank you Karen 🙂
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Took me for a look as I was picture kids with an adventure or on Christmas … big oops on my part. Good job!
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Well I like when my stories surprise. Thanks Frank!
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🙂
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JACKIE PPPPPP…..
Good fun here. Liked the hurried rush up followed by the floating down…Nice movement in this piece. An enjoyable 100 word adventure.
Tom
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Tom PPPP thanks for reading. I wanted something more adventurous this week. Glad you liked it!
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Jackie, I have to tell you, your Friday Fictioneers are some of the best. I love them!
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Thank you so much Miss! I really appreciate that. 🙂
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Nice escape Jackie! And a surprising end again – loved it!
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Thank you Tiny!
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Neat tale, well created.
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Thank you 🙂
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HI Jackie
Nice story! I can just see them floating to the bottom – let’s hope none of those soldiers have any parachutes 🙂
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they don’t have any. I erased them. haha! 🙂
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Hey, that was cute…
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thanks Ted!
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I’m so glad they had a parachute!
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me too! Thanks for reading
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🙂
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Good. They remembered to pull their ripcords. Just enough tension with an aah at the end.
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Thank you Rochelle
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nice escape, jackie.
Aloha,
Doug
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thank you Doug!
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Love this Jackie!! Fantastic story.
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thank you Marisa!
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I hope the parachutes were bullet-proof! Nice story. I like the happy ending. We so rarely get away from our pursuers! Ann
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It was such a surprise they didn’t even shoot! Thanks for reading.
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Some mercenaries they were! Ann
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a really creative take on the prompt..i love the parachutes!:)fun read
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thanks kz!
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Ah, base jumping. A good way to get away, although parachutes are rather trackable! There are a lot of people escaping up these stairs, I’m glad yours had an exit plan for when they reached the top
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never underestimate a good plan of action. 😉 thanks for reading!
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