I’m going to skip any chatter today and go right to the good stuff. Well except to thank Rochelle Wisoff-Fields once again for hosting. And to let you know you can click on her name and that will take you to her blog where you can read about the few rules we have. Also you can scroll down on Rochelle’s blog till you meet the blue critter, then click on him and from there you can read lots of other great stories based on the same picture. Go there. Now! 😉
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and an end. (No one will be ostracized for going over or under the word count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
Genre- General Fiction (100 words)
He stopped running, bending he breathed in big gulps of air. Racing heart, sweat running down his face he noticed things getting blurry.
No! He refused to lose focus. Chest heaving, shins burning, he straightened and started running again.
Almost tripping he managed to keep running. He had to get there! He was not quitting! Lungs burning, he noticed the bus that passed, almost in slow motion.
Brushing the sweat out of his eyes, he kept moving. It was a matter of pride now.
Wife bet him he couldn’t run to the corner and back. Show her who was out of shape!
The Last Chapter 
So unexpected! He was clearly out of shape…or maybe it was the 123 F heat?
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could be both tiny! 🙂
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Hahaha! THAT’S how it’s done! Very good, Jackie!
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thanks 🙂
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OMG..that was hilarious!
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thanks! 🙂
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Weekend warrior syndrome.
janet
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Or just didn’t want his wife to be right. ha!
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haha ^^ ‘It was a matter of pride now.’ i almost feel sorry for him.lol loved this
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thanks kz! 🙂
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That bit about ‘shins burning’ was one of those descriptive phrases that says it all. Well done, enjoyed this and a smile at the end of it.
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thank you Sandra! Made my morning. 🙂
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Dear Jackie,
Ouch! I love your intense descriptions that had me laboring for breath. Great ending line.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. Kind as always. 🙂
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Great pacing in this. I thought he was running to catch something or someone. I hope his wife’s proud of him when (if) he gets home.
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I”m sure she will be. Especially if he keeps running every day. 🙂
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Ha! Poor guy.
Loved the end, Jackie 🙂
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thank you Miss 🙂
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Love it!
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Thank you Lois! Have you been gone or am I just missing your posts?
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I was gone. I just got back tonight and have a new post up.
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Great twist at the end. I know how he feels. 🙂
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Oh so do I, but don’t tell anyone. 😉
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That’s a great take on the prompt.. loved the idea 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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