Hello People! Today is Friday! You all know what that means. Friday Fictioneer time!
For those that might not know what Friday Fictioneers are, let me tell you. This is a great group of people who write flash fiction (100 words) based on one photo that is generously provided by one of us. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields is our hostess every week. We have a few rules we try to follow, which can be found on Rochelle’s blog Addicted to Purple. If you are interested in joining us, please do! Or if you are interested in reading the many and various stories, again click on Rochelle’s name, scroll down till you meet the little blue guy and click on him. That will take you to all the great stories based from the same picture.
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and an end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
Genre: Literary Fiction (100 words)
“Isn’t the water beautiful Margaret?”
“Sure is Bart. We’ve been walking a long time, is it much farther?”
“Shouldn’t be too far. Just look at that sky!”
“That cloud reminds me of a dragon! Look Bart!”
“I see it, Margaret.”
” I’m so glad we took this vacation. Just what we needed, Bart.”
“I know my dear. After the year we had, we deserve some down time.”
“Are we close yet Bart?”
“I think I see it up ahead Margaret!”
“Thank goodness!”
“Here you go! Not exactly the stairway to Heaven, is it?”
“It is when you have a full bladder!”
lol priceless last line. i could only imagine her relief! 🙂
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Thanks kz! I have felt that relief a time or two. haha! 🙂
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I’m still laughing!! That was very clever 🙂
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Thank you tiny. The last two lines came first, then I had to figure out how to get there. haha! 🙂
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Are you sure you want to reveal the recipe? 🙂
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Hey I’m easy. haha! 🙂
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Awesome! I can tell the characters apart well, even without the use of their names. The last line was the best! And I see dragons in the clouds all the time! Lol
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I love dragons! 🙂 Thanks for the nice comment. Glad you stopped by!
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Very amusing! It’s hard even to appreciate a beautiful sky when your bladder is full 🙂
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Isn’t that the truth! 🙂 Thanks.
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Total giggles!
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Thanks! 🙂
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Great story Jackie, I know that feeling so well. Great fun.
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I know it too Michael. Aging is not for the wimpy. 😉
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Oh how fun this is Jackie. Great job.
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Thank you Kim! I had fun with it.
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Walking on a full bladder is not fun! I’m glad they made it.
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Me too! thanks Amy.
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Hahaha! Clever and witty finale, Jackie! I wasn’t sure whether to tell people it’s a bathroom… could have left it a mystery, but then we wouldn’t have this funny, well written story! Love it!
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Thank you! It’s a great picture. I had fun with it. 🙂
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Thanks, I love the photo, and it’s so fun to see what the group does with it! 😉
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Good one! Nice little one-two punch at the end 🙂
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Thank you Jan! 🙂
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Dear Jackie,
Nothing says aaaaaaah like a well needed bathroom to a full bladder. Funny! Glad I wasn’t drinking anything when I got to the last line.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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An empty bladder is a good thing. haha! Thanks Rochelle! 🙂
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seems bart simpson finally grew up. :).
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Not the direction I was expecting but it left me with a sense of relief.:)
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haha! I’m sure it left her with a sense of relief too. 😉
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I felt her pain… 🙂 good one
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Thank you! 🙂
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Unexpected and surprise ending. Love it! Hugs
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Thanks Mags!
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Haha, I know that feeling!
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Oh yea! 🙂
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Ha, oh man. Been there, felt that. But hey, it’s the ocean! She could have just gone in THERE! 😉
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True that. But she’s a true lady, not like us. hahaha! 🙂
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As slow as I move and with problems with stairs that would be me in the last line. Did you play the cloud game when young? I did it was the best way to pass the hours traveling to imagine what the clouds looked like.
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Oh yeah, I still play the cloud game. I’m never growing up! 🙂
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Me either. 🙂
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