THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and an end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)
THE KEY:
MAKE. EVERY. WORD. COUNT.
Thank you Rochelle for another great Friday Fictioneers. If you want to see what the Friday Fictioneers is all about click here. If you want to read other great stories based on the same picture, click here.
Genre: Literary Fiction (98 words)
“The hay is making me sneeze!”
“Hush Hanna! The driver will hear you.”
“Aaaachoooo! Mica the hay is driving me crazy! It itches too!”
“Would you rather have walked to town?”
“When Papa finds out we’ve run away to get married, he is going to be so angry.”
“Once we are man and wife, Hanna it won’t make any difference.”
“You are right, I will stop complaining.”
“We are almost there Hanna. Once the tractor slows be careful jumping down. Soon we will be man and wife.”
Once down, they heard a voice………
“Well daughter, what have you to say for yourself?”
The Last Chapter 
Great story Jackie. I wonder what their answer might have been?
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Probably something like …”oh crap!” LOL
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I feared as much.
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Dude, your page looks so legit right now. Can I brag here? Seriously, I refreshed the page just now because I had the window open still from your last page, and wow. I hope it works for ya!
\m/
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thanks Adam! It does look good doesn’t it? I hope you see I mentioned you as the creator of my header? I hope you get tons of business!
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I see it now, and thanks! Very much appreciated, and me too!
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Duuude! Nice job! Jackie, the new look is fantastic… Adam’s a doll, and you two have really made this site look awesome! Congrats Jackie! Bravo Adam!
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thank you! Yeah, Adam knows his stuff. 🙂
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Thanks and thanks, chick! It was a fun one to create \m/
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Ooops! Papa is sure determined!
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Papa doesn’t like being disobeyed. Thanks for stopping by!
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Haha nice on Jackie 🙂 I say can you reveal the answer?
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I’m sure there was a lot of tears and trying to explain things with Papa not being happy at all. 🙂
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Seems likely. 🙂
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Your site looks GREAT!! And the story was unexpected to start with and then the father appears! But we can always make up a happy ending 🙂
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Happy endings are always welcomed tiny! 🙂
Thank you about the site, I thought it turned out well.
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Doesn’t sound like this is going to go so well for our young lovers!
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Yes, I’m afraid Papa is very angry. Thanks for coming by!
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Nice story and loved your new site.
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thank you Sandra!
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Your blog looks awesome! I love the new header. 🙂
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Thank you rara! Adam did good didn’t he? 🙂
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Uh oh. How did he get there? Fun little piece.
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Well, I noticed a little car following the hay wagon, so I thought perfect for Papa! Thanks for reading Patrick!
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Good story, Jackie, and the site looks lovely.
janet
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Thank you Janet, appreciate it.
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great twist. didn’t expect it. 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
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Oh dear. All that discomfort for nothing … 😉
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Love sometimes has to do what it has to do. Thanks for stopping in! 🙂
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uh-oh… i guess Papa’s one step ahead.(or behind.) too bad for the couple. but i suppose they’re to young anyway so he might be doing them a favor 🙂 great story. also, the blog looks fantastic. 🙂
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Thank you kz! I’m thinking the couple is way too young, but young love is sometimes powerful. 🙂
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Good story that’s well done. The couple did sound young. I think her dad is right and they should wait.
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Oh no doubt. Somehow I think papa was right too. 🙂 Thanks for stopping by!
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Perfect…I was into it…let the parents sort it out…but love will last forever!
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I always thought love will last forever and beyond it seems….with my dad and I.
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I have a feeling it was the hay that got them there in the first place. Fun story, Jackie!
I’m not sure I’m replying in the right box. My computer is ill today.
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Thanks Amy, the comment got to me that’s all that matters. 🙂
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Hey, I love the new look. Is the banner Adam’s work?
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Sure is! Isn’t it good! I have a little note on the side bar that mentions he did it. Isn’t he doing one for you too?
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It’s so cool! Did you give him guidance? He’s doing one for me, yes! I can’t wait to see what he comes up with.
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Yes I gave him some idea of what I wanted in it, he did the rest. I love the details he puts in, like the coffee cup and pencil holder. Those were his ideas there.
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Congratulations on the new blog–great look. As far as Papa goes, he is a determined man. And he might be right–Mica sounds awfully anxious to get married–is he after Hanna or her dowry?
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Thanks vb! Well they might be too young too, so maybe it’s a bit of both. Thanks for stopping in!
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Oh dear. The best laid plans and all that. All that suffering in the hay for nothing!
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Yes, I know, but they wouldn’t listen to Papa. thanks for stopping in!
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Dear Jackie,
My heart skipped a beat at the last line. They were almost home free. Good one and my compliments on the site. Very nice.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. Yes, they almost made it. Maybe next time.
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Gosh hope things do somehow work out for this young couple! Nice job with the prompt!
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Thank you so much!
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Drat!
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Exactly!
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That’ll teach them to jump on any passing tractor. I wouldn’t want to talk my way out of this one.
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Oh I wouldn’t want to talk my way out either, don’t think they can with Papa.
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