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Friday Fictioneers ~~ March 14, 2014

JackieP

Welcome to the land of Friday Fictioneers which starts on Wednesday. Please don’t be confused, as people from all over the world participate and so the challenge has to start on Wednesday to be fair to those all over.

Thanks for reading and visiting and if you would like to participate with us, please head over to the headmistress Rochelle’s  blog and read up on the few rules. If you just want to read other great stories based from the same picture, then click here and read away! Oh, make sure you read and comment on mine first though. Thank you very much!

THE CHALLENGE:

Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and an end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)

THE KEY:

MAKE. EVERY. WORD. COUNT.

copyright – Adam Ickes
Copyright – Adam Ickes

 

 

Genre: Literary Fiction (100 words)

Walking down the planks she is frightened, her heart beats fast, her palms sweaty, her breath taken in short gasps.

Marriage, arranged when she was but a child. A man she has never seen. Now grown, she is told to fulfill her obligations.

Her mind screams, no! But her feet take her onward.

A love is in her heart for another.  Alas, he also is promised to another, as that is the way of her people.

She walks to the end, lifts her eyes in fear. Tears start to fall, as she sees her lover waiting for her.

Their eyes show relief, then love.

 

 

 

 

54 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers ~~ March 14, 2014”

  8. I enjoyed the happy ending, too, Jackie, and I can imagine her relief at seeing the man she loved. I’m a little confused, though. How was she there without anyone else around if it was supposed to be her marriage? If it wasn’t her marriage, why was she meeting the man for the first time alone? Not trying to nitpick, just feel as though I’m missing something.

    You hear lots of terrible stories about arranged marriages but we know an Indian couple who had an arranged marriage and it’s worked better then many non-arranged ones. Input by the couple works the best. How horrible if you were betrothed to someone old enough to be your father or a horrible person!!

    janet

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    1. It started out much longer with other people, but I had to cut something to make it 100 words so I’m afraid that’s what got cut. It was hard but I loved the story I wanted to tell. 🙂
      Sorry if you got a bit confused.

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  10. A bit of a “The Graduate” slant to the ending–where do they go from here? We need a sequel on our happy couple–they definitely have our sympathies and good wishes.

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  13. I’m so delighted this had a happy ending, Jackie. That would be horrible if they couldn’t stand each other. Surprisingly, sometimes these things work out. Unique take!

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  14. Hi Jackie
    Great story – nice twist – I didn’t see that coming 🙂 What a lucky pair, and how lucky most of us are to be allowed to make our own choices.

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  17. Dear Jackie,

    So in the end, they’re actually betrothed to each other without knowing it? Or they’re running away together? Either way, love a happy ending. Nice one.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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  18. Good story with a great happy ending. Many of the Indian couples we know who had arranged marriages were able to meet and talk so they knew a bit about each other and could decide if they wanted to go ahead with the marriage. We even went to an engagement ceremony for one couple. Of course with some more traditional families it’s still done the old way.

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  20. Cool-I love happy endings and interesting that the supposedly “illicit” romance become “legal” here-yay for that too:-)

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  24. Well done. You painted her fear and trepidation so strongly that I was relieved at the end with them.

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