Children’s laughter floats upon the air
Spun sugar smells linger here and there
Swan boat sits in waters eerily still
It’s paint peeling, reeds growing, at a standstill
Ferris wheel, large circle outlined against the sky
Seats swinging, creaking, a bit cock-eye
Once painted bright colors of all hues
Faded now with rust showing through
I stand upon the rotting pier
Bare trees stand sentinel so austere
I close my eyes against the lambast
A silent tear falls, abandoned to the past.
I enjoy reading, writing, and painting. I love animals and at present have one dog (Sam) and 2 cats (brother and sister, Notwen and Pouncer). I've lived in various places in the USA and now in Canada. I've always enjoyed watching life and people and have developed an appreciation for it all. My outlook is sometimes out of the normal.... but that's what makes things so interesting! I am always interested in the opinions of others. Everyone has their own outlook and it's always worthwhile to listen!
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What amazing imagery and excellent prose. This one painted the picture and rolled off the tongue. Readers ought to be happy to find just one, so to see them both … We’ll done.
Glad I stopped by. I wish I knew the technical terms to compliment you the right way on this, but it’s like, the structure was perfect and every word in every place.
What amazing imagery and excellent prose. This one painted the picture and rolled off the tongue. Readers ought to be happy to find just one, so to see them both … We’ll done.
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Thank you very much Eli! I appreciate it.
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Glad I stopped by. I wish I knew the technical terms to compliment you the right way on this, but it’s like, the structure was perfect and every word in every place.
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Well thanks! I’m pretty new at poetry so I don’t know the terms yet either, but I know a really nice compliment when I get it, so thank you.
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I think you have found your poetry nich. I could smell, taste, feel, hear and see the whole amusment park. Great metaphors.
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Thank you Kim! Coming from you that has made my day!
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🙂
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Excellent imagery Jackie and I like so much how you have concluded the poem, a statement of closure and a step forward. Well done.
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thank you Michael. I enjoyed doing this one.
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Oh, Jackie. That was so lovely. You make poetry so enjoyable for someone like me. 🙂
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Thank you Marlene, so glad you liked it. Hope you are doing well my friend 🙂
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Beautiful words, Jackie! 🙂
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Thank you 🙂
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Really beautiful imagery. Took me out of this world for a while. 🙂
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Thank you Charlie, a great compliment any writer would wish for. 🙂
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This poem is wonderful. It has a very intriguing ambience, almost calling to go there.
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I felt that too tiny, the picture is great isn’t it?
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It truly is! But your poem was the other piece of it.
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thank you tiny!
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Very nice! Hugs
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Thanks Mags!
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