Another Friday is here good people. Hope you have a wonderful weekend!
Below you will find another one of my very first posts. It was a short, short story, where I dabbled in fantasy a bit. I still like the story line, let me know what you think. I have thought about expanding the story into a book. I think it has promise.
For your reading pleasure I present to you…………………………
Alei
Alei stood still as a rock, alone as she preferred. Facing the dais and the only person who could grant her the one thing that made all her hard work worth it. She heard the faint rustle of the crowd behind her. Her fellow classmates in the only school of its type. A place where its secrets outnumbered its residents. Where to survive you had to be smarter, quicker and deadlier than all the others. And she was. She had proved that. It was a school that was well-known for producing the best assassins in all the universes.
She stood still, with only her eyes following the man above her. Her inky black hair spiky on top of her head. Her eyes, the eyes of her people. Deep purple with a black outer rim, slightly slanted. Her skin bronze, with the black tattoo’s that showed others, she was of the tribe Aleiata of the planet Tambos. A once proud and majestic people, her tribe had been slaughtered by an army run by the very man who was standing on the dais in front of her. She was the only survivor, a baby back then, only five years old.
The man, a powerful assassin, named Drimel thought it would be amusing to take her and school her into what he was. He named her Alei after her people and thrust her in this school to be shaped and molded into what she was today.
Twenty years later, she stood silent, nothing moving but her purple eyes. Waiting to be told she was a full fledged killer. Waiting to told what her first assignment was.
Waiting to kill.
Hmmm. Maybe her first assignment should be to take him out. 🙂 Interesting opening. You can go a long way with this.
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I know where I would take the story. It’s in the back of my mind all the time. I may expand on it here. 🙂
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A follow-up to this story would be good to see what her first assignment was. Hugs
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Good point Mags. I will have to see what I can do. Hugs!
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Did a good job of building suspense (and yes, continue the story?)
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Thanks! I do have the continuation in my mind. I should write it down, just wanted to see if there was interest. 🙂
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Who wouldn’t want to be an assassin. Terry Pratchett explores assassins very humourously in his books when he deals with the The Assassins Guild. Good luck there is much you could expand on Jackie.
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Thanks Michael!
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I love how you manage to create so much emotion and depth in short pieces. This is definitely a story that should be expanded upon. She has work ahead of her! Nice job, Jackie!
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Thank you Maddie 🙂
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I’m happy she is an alien 🙂 More seriously, this is a good beginning for a longer story! Have a good weekend, my friend.
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Thank you tiny! You have a wonderful weekend yourself my friend!
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