Friday Fictioneers ~~ Jan 24, 2014

Hello people! It’s time for that all time favorite activity, Friday Fictioneers! Come join the fun, either reading or writing. Rochelle is our hostess every week and she does a great job. Click on her name and find out what all the fuss is about.

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This week’s picture prompt is:

Copyright – Björn Rudberg
Copyright – Björn Rudberg

Genre: General Fiction (100 words)

Twenty years he spent on this mountain top. In a ramshackle house with a run down barn.

Today was the day he was leaving. He couldn’t take it anymore. Living like this, barely eating, hardly surviving.

Twenty years must be enough for people to forget.  He had been young, foolish, quick-tempered. Now he was tired and worn down.

For days he walked till he came upon the town. Two men approached him. He felt no fear as they blocked his way.

“We heard you were back old man.”

He just stared at a younger version of himself.

“Come along. Ma’s been waiting long enough.”

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40 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers ~~ Jan 24, 2014

  1. the son returns. wonderful take on the photo, jackie. i thought he was punishing himself but realized it could’ve also been pride and stubbornness. well done 🙂

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  2. Sounds as if he might have been the one not to forget and believe he could be forgiven. I thought here, ” Now he is tired”, that “He was tired” would be in keeping with the rest of the story which is in the past tense. The tense switch jarred me from the flow of the story. 🙂 Glad he’s coming back!

    janet

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