Happy Friday everyone! Hope your week went well. Now the weekend is coming up so go and enjoy it.
It’s Friday Fictioneer time again. I love Fridays. Anyway, by now you all know the drill. There is a picture below that I attempt to write a 100 word story about. Then I tell you about Rochelle Wisoff-Fields who is our tour guide for this thing. She is off partying with other Fictioneers at this time and I hope they have lots of fun! Anyway, click on Rochelle’s name and that will take you to her blog where the rules for this weekly fling is posted and where you can also scroll down and click on the cute Lil’ blue guy and he will take you to the page where you can read lots of other stories from great writers based from the same picture. So go and enjoy yourself! And tell them Jackie sent ya!
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and an end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)
THE KEY:
Make every word count.
The alley was eerily quiet. Sara checked her cell once more. Yes, this was the place. Why was it so quiet when the streets on each side were seas of humanity?
Breathing deeply, Sara took the first step inside the alley. Then another, as she listened for voices. There! She heard it! The voice of her son, “Mama!”
She dropped the package in the dark corner as instructed, walked a few more paces and trembled.
From a shadow stepped a man with her son. It was worth any amount to have her son back from the father who stole him.
The Last Chapter 
The picture does speak of clandestine rendezvous, and you took the setting and used it well, darling.
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thank you so much Helena.
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Lots of mystery here, it feels like you had a whole lot more story in your head
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I did indeed, then I had to cut it down to 100 words. Wasn’t easy. Thanks for stopping by! 🙂
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Breathe my words to you? I’m out of breath from your story. Every parent can relate to this and you built the suspense well!
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thank you! You breathed pretty darn good. 😉
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frightening real life horror.really great take on the prompt.
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Thank you kz!
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Good suspense, Jackie. And I had no idea where it was going to go. Well done, believable story.
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Thank you Amy. Thanks for stopping by and reading. Appreciate it.
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I liked this one!
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Thank you Dawn. 🙂
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Oh, wow! One of the best ever! Loved it, simple.
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Thank you tiny! 🙂
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I would have kept the money. No I wouldn’t! I’d have paid up for my CAT to be returned. You’ve used the atmosphere suggested by the photo rather well. I hope that RAT meets a big CAT! Good luck with Nanowrimo. Ann
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Thank you Ann! Yes I would have paid anything also. Good luck to you too!
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Great story. You can get a lot of mileage out of that one. I was noticing the road looked like one that was for old fashioned cars with narrow tires that had to drive up just the right spots like ramps. Very interesting photo.
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Thank you. Yeah I could make a whole big story from that little bit. Actually had it in my head then had to cut it way down. That hurt. 🙂
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Dear Jackie,
Feel like you’ve packed a novella into 100 words. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
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Difficult concept to get into 100 – well done.
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It was difficult yes, but that’s what spoke to me so I just tried harder. Thanks for reading Sandra.
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Loved where you took this prompt and specially cos there was a happy ending:-)
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Thank you. I love happy endings too 🙂
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🙂
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I can’t imagine having something like this happen. Really good job with only 100 words.
janet
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Thank you Janet.
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wow great story
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Thank you
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